Name: Hoàng Linh Chi
Student’s code: 19475601
TOPIC: Write an analysis essay about someone
who has been a role model or mentor in your own
life. Explain and analyze the qualities that make
the person a good role model or mentor.
When you write an essay, create coherence
between your ideas using transition words like
first, in addition, and for example.
CLASS: DHAV15C – 420300369208
Second draft
An ideal model is one of the most important things in our life, which
enormously influence our lifestyle. A role model can be anyone that
surrounding us, like parents, superheroes, singers, etc. For me, Helly
Tong, a founder of some agencies in Việt Nam, is my ideal type that I
particularly admire due to her great qualities.
First of all, she is a young, successful woman with a lot of achievements
in her life. She is also a person of high attainment which is performed
greatly in her learning stage. I always want and try to be a person like
her. Moreover, her achievements pushed me to learn more studious
and make an effort in my future plan.
