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PART 1
MARKS AND FEEDBACK
1. Content – 7/ - The student answers the question and discusses all the required points. - Some ideas (e.g. transport and recycling) are clear and relevant. - However, the arguments lack development, and the conclusion is a bit defeatist rather than reflective. To improve: Add specific examples or possible solutions in the paragraphs (“Governments could invest in electric buses”, “Citizens can volunteer to clean rivers”). 2. Communicative Achievement – 6/ - The tone is generally appropriate for an essay (formal/neutral). - However, the title “THE WORLD CAN CHANGE?” isn’t correctly written, it should be “Can the world change?” but it doesn’t introduce the topic of environment. - Some phrases are too conversational or awkward , e.g. “if the people use subway or bus as a diary transport.” To improve: Use more formal connectors (“Furthermore”, “For instance”, “On the contrary”). 3. Organisation – 7/ - The essay is clearly divided into paragraphs and ideas follow a logical order. - Connectors are used (“Firstly”, “On the other hand”, “However”, “In conclusion”) — good range. - However, there are some linking and punctuation errors that affect fluency. To improve: Use commas correctly after linking words, and vary connectors (“Moreover”, “Nevertheless”, “For example”). 4. Language – 5/ - Frequent grammar and vocabulary errors (article misuse, plural forms, spelling mistakes, verb forms).
- Limited range of vocabulary and expressions typical of B2 essays. To improve: Use more precise and varied vocabulary (e.g. “reduce emissions”, “industrial waste”, “sustainable lifestyle”). Check accuracy : plural forms, word order, articles, and spelling. COMMON ERRORS + CORRECTIONS Original Corrected Comment It is a reallity It is a reality Spelling mistake. There are a lot of information There is a lot of information “Information” is uncountable. if the people use subway or bus as a diary transport if people used the underground or buses for daily transport Use “people” (no article), correct “diary” → “daily”, and use “the underground” for British English. The biggests companys send their toxics wastes The biggest companies send their toxic waste “Biggests” → “biggest”, plural “companies”, uncountable “waste”. Althought this is a huge problem Although this is a huge problem Spelling error. normal people can not do, practically, nothing against it ordinary people can do practically nothing about it Double negative + word order + register. recyclying recycling Spelling mistake. to kids and add it in every house to children and encourage it in every household Improve register and vocabulary. is tottally free, as well as money and time is completely free and saves both money and time Idiomatic correction. if every person help with littles and some big action if everyone helped with small and large actions Grammar: 3rd person singular, plural forms.
o big companies → large corporations o toxic wastes → industrial waste o help the planet → protect the environment o a lot of pollution → high levels of pollution
- Learn more collocations : reduce emissions , damage the ecosystem , raise awareness , take action. OVERALL MARKS (OUT OF 10) Criterion Mark Comment Content 7 Covers all points, relevant, but needs more development. Communicative Achievement 6 Tone appropriate but lacks sophistication and range. Organisation 7 Logical structure and clear paragraphs, but linking could improve. Language 5 Frequent grammar, spelling, and lexical errors.
PART 2
MARKS (out of 10 each) Criterion Mark Justification Content
All parts of the task are covered. However, some explanations are confusing or inaccurate, and certain details (like how to travel between places or why each is special) could be more clearly developed. Communicative Achievement
The tone is friendly and appropriate for an email to a friend, but sometimes informal phrasing becomes too colloquial or unclear ( “they would to spend two or three days” ). Some ideas are not fully explained, and the message loses flow. Organisation
The email is divided into paragraphs with logical progression (introduction → sightseeing → nature → conclusion). However, there are a few abrupt transitions and some sentences are long or disorganised. Connectors ( Moreover, On the other hand, In summary ) are used correctly but somewhat mechanically, some of them are too formal. Language
There is clear effort to use a range of vocabulary and tenses, but frequent grammatical mistakes (verb forms, articles, prepositions, plural/singular, word choice) affect accuracy and clarity. Some errors are typical of B1–B2 level Spanish learners. Vocabulary is adequate but could be more precise and idiomatic. Final Score: 7 / 10 (borderline B2) With clearer structures, more accurate grammar, and better control of tenses and articles, this would be a solid B2 response. DETAILED FEEDBACK Strengths
- Friendly and natural tone — appropriate register.
- Attempts to use a range of connectors and descriptive vocabulary.
- Task fully addressed (places + transport).
- Personal involvement adds authenticity (offering to guide them).
They would to spend two or three days in Cartagena. Correction: They could spend two or three days in Cartagena. “Would to” is grammatically incorrect → use “could” for polite suggestion. Moreover, we have a lot of nature and I think it’s unknown from the rest of the world, even for spanish people. Correction: Moreover, we have a lot of natural beauty which is unknown to most people, even to many Spaniards. “Nature” → “natural beauty”; “unknown from” → “unknown to”; capitalise “Spanish”. I live near to the sea and there are many beautiful beaches where we could do some activities: paddel surf, snorkel, kayak, great views... Correction: I live near the sea, and there are many beautiful beaches where we could do some activities such as paddle surfing, snorkelling or kayaking, and enjoy some great views. “Near to” → “near”; sport names need - ing form; spelling corrections; sentence flow improved. On the other hand, although I’m a sea girl, there are more nature to discover. Correction: On the other hand, although I’m a sea lover, there’s more nature to discover inland. “Sea girl” is awkward; “sea lover” is more natural. Add “inland” for clarity. If your friends are sunset’s lovers we could do a walk to Peñas Blancas, Algarrobo or if they want to a good view but they aren’t good walkers, Gesa, last one is easier. Correction: If your friends love sunsets, we could go for a walk to Peñas Blancas or Algarrobo. If they prefer an easier route with great views, Gesa is perfect. Rewritten for clarity, correct plural, remove possessive error “sunset’s lovers”. In summary, they only have to rent a car and tell me what are their preferences and I’ll do the rest. Correction: In summary, they just need to rent a car, tell me their preferences, and I’ll take care of the rest.
“What are their preferences” → indirect question → “tell me their preferences”; natural phrasing. Kisses, Alicia. Correction: Best wishes, Alicia. “Kisses” is acceptable in very informal emails, but “Best wishes” fits better for exam tone while keeping friendliness. GRAMMAR & VOCABULARY AREAS TO IMPROVE Area Error examples Correction / Practice Verb patterns think in Cartagena , would to spend “think of”, “would like to”, “could spend” Articles & prepositions near to the sea , unknown from “near the sea”, “unknown to” Word forms & spelling inmediately , romains , paddel surf “immediately”, “Romans”, “paddle surf(ing)” Possessives & plurals roman’s influence , sunset’s lovers “Roman influence”, “sunset lovers” Natural expressions guide of my town , sea girl “show people around”, “sea lover” Sentence structure Long, confusing sentences Split long ideas into two clear clauses; use commas appropriately. HOW TO GET A HIGHER MARK (B2+ / 8–9 range) Use more varied connectors : “Besides”, “As well as that”, “For example”, “To sum up”. Include specific details : “They could visit the Roman Theatre Museum, which is one of the most famous in Spain.” Keep a consistent tone : friendly but not childish. Proofread for verb forms and prepositions — these are the main source of mistakes. Avoid literal translations from Spanish (e.g. “I thought in” → “I thought of” ).
