Example Essay: Methods of minimising the use of fossil
fuels
Ever since the industrial revolution we have become increasingly dependent on fossil
fuels, which are not only finite, but are also having a devastating effect on air quality
and the global climate. Clearly measures must be taken to reduce their use, but how
can this be achieved most effectively?
On the one hand, a greater use of recycling has been proposed as a possible
solution. It is thought that if governments invested in improved plants and
incentivised the recycling of household waste, our reliance on non-renewable
resources would decrease. However, current technology is perhaps not sufficiently
advanced to recycle efficiently. Indeed, many argue that the recycling process itself
requires more energy, which is usually produced using fossil fuels, than in creating
new products.
Alternatively, another solution might be to satisfy most of our energy needs through
nuclear power. Although there can be no denying the potentially devastating effects
of a nuclear disaster, current safety measures may well justify increased nuclear
electricity production. Despite continuing to make use of natural resources, it has
been shown to be far more efficient than other non renewables, as well as being
more economically viable than renewable energies, such as wind or solar power.
In conclusion, considering the limited benefits of recycling in terms of fossil-fuel
usage outlined above, I strongly believe that the increased use of nuclear power
should be the first priority for our governments. While we continue to explore
alternatives in the form of renewable energies, this will be the most effective way to
make an immediate impact.
Word count: 256
General notes on structure:
I have used only four paragraphs: this is all you will need for any Cambridge
advanced essay.
Introduction: providing background and restating the issue
First paragraph: First topic
Second paragraph: second topic
Conclusion: Clearly stating which you have chosen and why.
Comentado [T1]: In my introduction I attempt to provide some
kind of background for the issue.
What is the current situation?
Why is this important? Why does the issue need to be addressed?
My final questions makes it clear to the reader what the objective of
the essay is.
Comentado [T2]: Expressions highlighted in bold are examples
of language used to link my ideas and make my writing more
complex and cohesive.
Comentado [T3]: This is an example of a topic sentence. This is a
single sentence that establishes what the paragraph is going to be
about. Notice that it is more developed than, “One possibility is
recycling”.
Comentado [T4]: Underlined phrases such as these have been
highlighted to show my use of impersonal language and passive
constructions.
Notice the absence of “I”, “you”, or “we” before the concluding
paragraph.
Comentado [T5]: I have made sure to clearly state which option
I believe is preferable, while refraining from introducing new ideas in
the conclusion. What is more, my conclusion reflects the ideas
presented in the main part of my essay.